Phoenix Rising

The first few lines of this poem just came to me while I was trying to go to sleep. They were so emotional that I had to write them down. Once I started writing I couldn't stop and this is the result, without editing or review. It's very descriptive of my life and I think the words and the imagery are beautiful, I even cried a little while writing. I decided that I couldn't wait to post it and see what ya'll thought about it.

I am falling, tumbling

The ground rises to break me

My wings are shattered, torn

They cannot hold me, cannot lift me

I am fragile, broken

An empty shell

Lying still, I breathe

Trying to think, I dream

I remember flying high

Soaring through the clouds

My world was shattered, broken

No one can help me now

I scream, I wail

No one can hear my cry

I feel the flames

They torch my soul

Tonight is where I die

My sins are my funeral pyre
I blaze in the glorious fire

I am burnt, I am scorched

I am rekindled, I am new

I rise from the ashes that I once was

I soar from the pain that I once knew

Reborn from the flame

Renewed from the fire

Wrapped in gowns of crimson

My feathers are tipped in gold

Now a vermilion fire-bird

I cry with a strength of ages untold

Soaring again in the heavens

I embrace my beautiful release

What once was my death note taken

Is now my power and peace

Away I fly from the horror

From the sins of a past gone to rest

I rise like the flames of the pyre

A phoenix rising to the test.

After I finished writing I noticed that the first stanza is very sharp and the lines are kinda clipped and blunt. There is also not a lot of rhyming. However the lines in the second stanza are long and flowing with several rhymes. I also noticed that the vocabulary became richer in the second stanza. Again there was no editing involved I basically vomited on paper (a phrase from my high school Lit teacher) and then posted it straight away. I don't usually edit things, especially poetry, because I believe there is a reason why I chose that phrasing in that instant of time and that reason can add depth and meaning to your work. I would love to hear your reviews of this and your takes on the symbolism behind the differences in the stanzas. Oh and I know I used the first pic before on my magickal names post, but I thought the scene fit really well with the overall imagery of the poem. And yes the second is supposed to be Phoenix from the X-men (yes I am a nerd) but again I thought it fit well. Here are two more that I liked and that I think fit well. P.S. I get the majority of my pictures from Deviant Art, I love the artwork on there and the people are amazingly talented. 

Well I am going back to bed now to rest my weary wings and renew my burnt batteries. I hope you all have sweet dreams and restful sleeps.

As always Blessed Be and lots of love!!